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Falchion1984 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2011
I have a thought on a small improvement you could make to chapter 4 of Wings of a New Dawn. Please let me know if you're interested.
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deathzealotzero Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
What would that be?
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Falchion1984 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
Perhaps, in this chapter or the next, we could get into Claudia's reaction to Roy not coming home and how it was discovered that Roy was missing rather than dead. Perhaps, when Claudia hears the news, she either refuses to believe it and pours over the sensor data to find Roy still alive or, seeing that Claudia is unraveling, Lisa does so to try and give her friend some closure. In either case, Roy is intially presumed dead because the beacon from his ejection pod stopped transmitting (the most likely cause being that a Zentraedi blasted it). However, when either Claudia or Lisa (or both, perhaps) take a closer look at the data, they discover that the beacon didn't stop transmitting; it was moved out of range of the SDF-1's sensors. Inserting a portion like that would explain how Gloval and the others on the SDF-1 knew (or, at least, had good reason to suspect) that Roy was still alive. They likely would have little concrete evidence as to the culprit (the U.E.G, I presume?) but they'd likely suspect the Zentraedi. After all, who else would they suspect at such a juncture? Does this sound good?
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Falchion1984 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2011
I just read the latest chapter of Wings of a New Dawn. Interesting twist at the end there.
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Falchion1984 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2011
You're known as DeathZealot on fanfiction.net, right? I heard you're rewriting that ROBOTECH fic Frozen in Time. Coolness. I read that story back when you were first putting it up. I liked it, but I thought it needed some polishing. I did have some thoughts from my last reading (and a couple of new ones that popped into my head when I read that the BATTLECRY characters would be in on this version). Would you like to hear my thoughts or have you got it covered? Please let me know and catch you later.
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deathzealotzero Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2011
Correct. I am deathzealot on FFN. And yes I am currently rewriting Frozen in Time. I think I got it pretty much covered, though some ideas on the sequel will be welcome. The sequel is going to be my NaNoWriMo Project this year, and I might need some good ideas. I have a couple large ideas that started this whole thing, but other ideas will be welcome.

However the Battlecry characters may not have a large role in the Wings of a New Dawn, thanks to it focusing on Rick and Lisa. The sequel might have them a more major role.

Thanks again for the review. Though kind of weird having it here on DA.
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Falchion1984 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011
Well, I'll start off with two items here:

First, however much face time the Battlecry characters get, I think this would be a great chance to flesh out the whole Jack/Izzy/Hiro friendship. Also, if Jack stays on the SDF-1 (possibly he decides to stay after attending Roy's funeral, assuming Roy still dies) perhaps he can also play a role in helping Rick to cope. Or, if Roy lives this time around, maybe Roy and Jack could share some of the old war stories with Rick for a few laughs.

Second, as I said earlier, I like the idea of the Allie computer being able to "choose" to help Admiral Hayes but, if you're interested, I have ideas about how to redo the execution. Please let me know if you like the idea.

As for ideas for the sequel, that's a little tougher since I don't know if the ending will be the same this time around. I remember that the SDF-1 and its fleet left earth after the U.E.G turned on them. Does that still hold true? If so, then what is the U.E.G's reaction? Perhaps some amongst them decide that, if the Zentradei are simply after the SDF-1, then the U.E.G capturing the space fortress and handing it over would be an effective peace offering? Perhaps Hayes and Gloval, realizing that they can't go head-to-head with the enemy with the U.E.G poised to stab them in the back, try to covertly recruit allies from the military? Another thing I'm wondering is if the Macross people will stay in the ship this time. Perhaps, with the two super computers, an option that was overlooked in the series is discovered? Finally, I'm wondering about how Rick gets on with papa-in-law. I don't know much about Admiral Hayes but, if I was in his position, I'd be concerned about my daughter getting pregnant within hours of her (rather rapid) marriage. A lot of couples who do what Rick and Lisa did usually don't last long; I suspect Rick and Lisa will be the exception, but it would make sense for Hayes to be concerned. Any of this sound good? Please let me know and catch you later.
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dragonofdarkness Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2011
heyo boyo i like your ships but if you added a size chart/scale it would make the first glance a little less confusing other whys good job :headbang:
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deathzealotzero Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2011
/blink/ My ships. You mean my lonely pair of Frakenships (i.e Baracheil and Shimakaze). Those aren't technically mine. They are modified from the original image by myself. Also normally people have watched the series those ships are from and know their size anyways so some kind of size chart is kind waste of time.
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